Facebook summary
Leake and Warren (2009) state that the report from Ohio State University found out that students who use Facebook do not score in their academic aspects as they tend to spend more time on this social media. The results of this was lower study efficiency as well as lower grades
Hi Albert! :)
ReplyDeleteSaw that there weren't any comments here so I thought I would give my two cents' worth :)
1) "Leake and Warren (2009) state that the report from Ohio State University found out that......" --> actually, the report did not find. The "report" sounds very humanized here.
2) "as they tend to spend more time on this social media." --> what is the social media? There wasn't any mention of the name of the social media you are referring in the summary. (I know it is in the title but maybe it is good if it is included in the actual summary! :))
3) Last sentence could be rephrased better like "This results in lower study efficiency and lower grades."
Great effort Albert :)
thanks for commenting maeve!:)
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